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Posted: 07 Aug 2016

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impermanence

impermanence
Handsome is as handsome does, they say.
Rose, don't trust his coat of iridescent green
the color of long-buried bottles
and suspect flesh, putrescent sheen.
Abuse you, won't he now, and throw you away.

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 Steve Bucknell
Steve Bucknell club
"And I am dumb to tell the eaten rose
How at my sheet goes the same crooked worm"....Dylan Thomas, tThe Force That.....or something like that.
7 years ago.
rdhinmn club has replied to Steve Bucknell club
Steve, I kept toying with titling it after the Blake that Britten set: "O rose, thou art sick. The invisible worm that flies in the heart of the howling storm hath plundered thy crimson bed." But the rose isn't crimson, and I may not have gotten the quote right, anyway.
7 years ago.
Steve Bucknell club has replied to rdhinmn club
Yes, the problem in both is the "worm"image...Beetles seem more ambiguous in some way...meaning eternity, new awakening, in the Egyptian cosmology.
You'll have to write your own rose/beetle poem!
7 years ago.
rdhinmn club has replied to Steve Bucknell club
Ok - a bit of doggerel added.
7 years ago.
Steve Bucknell club has replied to rdhinmn club
That's excellent...but what about "Use you" rather than "Waste you" ?
7 years ago.
rdhinmn club has replied to Steve Bucknell club
I like that idea. I guess I was aiming at a lot of "w" sounds in the line to keep it moving along and sound a bit moralistic, like the first line. How do you think "chew" sounds?

Later - I don't like that much either - too bug-specific when it should be ambiguous.
7 years ago. Edited 7 years ago.
 Andy Rodker
Andy Rodker club
WOW!
Sorry abut the 'w's
5 years ago.

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